New Song/Need Help

[Selinity]

i've got my new song updated, but it just needs more balance, variance, emotions, chords, etc! If anyone has any suggetions, can you please tell me what i'm doing wrong, and what i need to add?

The song is attached below

[NemisisAlice789]

That's a real pretty song.
Good job Selenity!

[Vocalist69]

Now that's deep "tear"

[Selinity]

wow, thanks for the comments! I was hoping for advice instead i found out that it isn't that bad. Thanks!

[RaId3R]

how u create this midi??

[Selinity]

well thier's various ways you can create your own mp3's or midis. For me, I used Noteworthy composer and saved it as a midi file. If you have noteworthy composer, just go to

* "save as"
* and at the bottom where it says standard NWC file, click on that and go to "type 1 midi file"
* and now click SAVE! and voila! you've created yourself a midi file, but of course, you must input/enter your chords first or song, then you can save. is this clear?

[RaId3R]

Yup...I use Anvil Studio to edit midis...too bad it can't print...but it can edit instrument pitch...loudness...etc...

[Akayama Kaoru]

I liked it a lot x It was very beautiful, congrats to you! You should have more confidence in yourself. ^^

[Selinity]

are you sure it's good? There's no comment on what is missing? I'd probabbly give it a 5/10!! hmmm, wow, ain't i fair... hahaha, o well, it's all in the emotions!

[Darren]

the piece sounds too slow to me. I don't mean slow in tempo. but probably in the lack of melody. Notice in many instances (say, from 0:10~0:25), the melody line and the bass are moving at the same duration ( half note?)- which is kind of annoying; it doesn't really bring out the melody.

I like the part 0:41~0:47, but overall it's a bit too simplistic compare to your other compositions.
but that doesn't mean I don't encourage simplicity.

[Selinity]

Thanks for the comments! Yeah, it is simple and slow. This was just a little practice though, and i still need more help so i can make this song be its best. If this won't impress me, it won't impress no one...

[Noir7]

I pretty much agree to what Darren said. It feels too empty, ya know? Even though it is supposed to be a slow song, it needs to be developed into a slow song the right way. Simplicity is my friend, but this is too simple and boring X_X Even if there is a melody, it gets the listener bored and impatient, waiting for something to happen, but there won't..

[Selinity]

yah, i know, a total waste of time........

if there's any pointers to what i should do, to make it less dull, please do!

In the meantime, i'll just go and play the piano.

[Archangel]

having a midi is nice, but if you can record it live, do it! a midi is more like better to see if it sounds right on a music sheet so you can print it out and share it, but, if you want to get your song fully shown, fully heard, i suggest playing it live and record it. to me, a live recording can let me feel what the pianist is feeling. a midi is written by you, but played by the computer... that's my opinion.
now that i've said that, the song is hard for me to focus cause i hear the "piano keys" getting banged at, meaning the sound is getting forced out of the instrument. the mood of it sounds great, but, again, needs a story. a kind of song like this needs a story. if it was a jazz piece, that is a whole different...story. anyways, i would suggest to either get a live recording or change the instrument cause there is to me too much reverb...
aside of all that, it is a good start. you have the idea, just let it the idea grow more, expand the horizon, ya get what i mean? hope to hear more of your compos!

Rate: 7.3/10

[Plod]

I'd give it a 4 maybe. It seems like you're throwing chords randomly around. I really can't feel a story. I'm sorry if my comments aren't detailed enough, but I hope they give you a general idea on how you should improve this one, or what you could incorporate into your next song.